Talk:Jeff Bezos/@comment-68.59.119.127-20120925031700

Reading the wiki entry, I learned that Jeff Bezos, the creator of Amazon, was extremely gifted from the beginning. Not only did he have an engineer’s mentality as a young child while trying to take apart his crib, he maintained that attitude throughout life. His idea for Amazon having one main source and branching out was genius. The article was very thorough when describing Bezos’ childhood and almost glazed over the middle of his life, then dove deep into the Amazon aspect. Although this is not all bad, I would like to know what bumps, if any, he hit while creating this successful online company. I would have also enjoyed more personal testimony from Bezos of his life and steps to fame and fortune. For the spelling/grammar portion of the assignment, I liked how many of the sentences were concise and straight to the point. However, this is also where there was a lack, many sentences I found either unnecessary, or disconnected and used as stand-alone sentences, where they should have connected to another idea for full effect. For example, the first few sentences of the last paragraph in the ‘Early Life’ section could have been re-written for a more full effect. As far as the information provided, it all seems to pan out according to the wiki entry. There don’t appear to be any mistakes as far as dates or citing go.