Talk:Brenda Dervin/@comment-5547212-20120926195136

Peer Review:

Great job writing about her early life, you really covered the main points of her successes, education, and had some other interesting facts about her personal life. I would have liked to see more about her background and why she did not pursue a career in her degree of journalism and home economics instead.

The Career section adds insight and more to her education than we knew from the early life segment. I really liked how you looked at her ratemyproffesor.com account and did the extra research. Maybe use more words instead of the bullet points, but either way it covered the requirements. The contributions section continues on what we learned earlier about Dervin’s work with Sense-Making Methodology. I definitely understood her work much better after reading this. I think you should’ve added more to the importance of her contributions; in the early life section I read that several studies used her work, those would have been good to reference again here and maybe elaborate on them more.

Publications, patents, and other intellectual property was well done; earlier I read that she had written over 200 articles, so I’m glad you posted the most important ones and not all of them. Not much to work on here, but it might have been good to include a link or two within this section especially as it deals with her works.

I was worried about the Awards and Recognitions being redundant but it wasn’t in the slightest. I read through the links and referenced sites and what you wrote was perfect for this section; everything that I would have included you already had. I was a little confused with your time stamp being in the way of your last paragraph. Make sure you fix that for the next assignment. As a side note, the parentheses of her being the first female elected added to a lot to your section.

The Critical Analysis and Interpretation section was solid, and the numbers at the end were a good addition. I think you could have added more to the section by describing Dervin with a few more sentences. Another thing I did not like was how it just seemed to abruptly end instead of finishing off the page on a good note.

As a whole, I really liked what I read. The entire group seemed to work together as the sections were not a repetition of the same information but had similar focus. The focus on her main work of the Sense-Making Methodology was well done throughout the assignment. I was disappointed that there was not a section for Application to IT or ITC professionals, and that took a lot away from the page. The references were good and I found the information from this page on all of these sites. So overall, well done!

-Austin Stowers