Talk:Tim Berners-Lee/@comment-5546941-20120927021611

This wiki was very enjoyable to read, and provided in great detail the accomplishments of such a crucial figure to the development of technology. In the early life section, i found the fact about how he was banned from using Oxford's university computers very interesting. The section was well covered, however there were a few grammatical errors. Specifically in the last two sentences of the section. I also would have liked to know why the ground breaking program -Enquire, was not released for public use; as well as some information on his family life and not all about his academics. Also, i believe splitting the section up into paragraphs could improve readability.

The career section was very well written and contained lots of factual information regarding dates, and places. The contributions section was very well done and grammatically sound. The awards and recognitions section was completely empty.

While reading the critical analysis section, i thought it seemed more like a summary than an analysis. it repeated alot of the information previously mentioned in the wiki, and the quote at the end seemed vaguely relatable to the topic. It did however look to be an accurate summary. I believe it would be benefical to right after stating his contributions, to add an analysis of how and why they affected the world.

Application to IT section missing. Reference section could use a few more references, and less wikipedia. Aside from the missing sections, this was a wonderful wiki page that had accurate and intersting information.